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I will take a look at it.

I find the mix between "guides" or sidenotes and the main text difficult to follow.

Hm.  Is that the font, or the scene/info/scene/info style of writing?  Perhaps I could have introduced a junior character, whose job it was to have things explained for him/her?

I also have questions regarding why Clan Wolverine kept the Clan way even if they left before everything was settled and were considered the most progressive of the Clans.

They spent 20 years training as a base-5 military unit?  I never went into it because it seemed too much backstory.  Would more backstory have helped?  I tried to cram enough into the 'prologue' to give a basic understanding and left it at that.

I think the first part would be better written as a chronological reminder at the beginning of your writings.
And a small explanation/map of the different planets/solar systems would be a welcomed addition.

Last for now, are there that much people going into exile in the Deep Periphery in this area?

I don't quite understand the first line, but I have a map I could add of the Legacy Cluster.

And yes, the waves of immigration during the Succession Wars offered an influx of educated and non-educated immigrants that allowed the smaller remnant of Clan Wolverine a chance to stay within shouting distance of the remaining Clan's birthrates.  Without immigration and the 'Prometheus Database', I couldn't come up with a way a smaller, weaker group would have a chance to fight Kerensky's Clans and be more than a speed bump.

But what do you think of the fight scene so far?  Up next is a shift to Brun's POV, listening to the announcer as Leslie tries to DFA from the second floor and both units are knocked out of the fight.  But this will be the last of Travis for now, Brun will get peripherally involved with Merchant stuff.